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The charts below show the percentage of male and female worker in country A and country B.

The charts below show the percentage of male and female worker in country A and country B.
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The pie charts compare differences in the proportion of men and women employees in two countries.
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, the service requires the vast majority of
working
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 force. Agriculture is the second most occupied sector in
the
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area A,
while
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the
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territory B focuses mainly on serving the people and industry. The figure
of
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 serving customers in the first country is the highest for both genders, showing 56% and 49%. The agricultural system contributes to the employment of 29% of males and 43% of females.
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, the manufacturing sphere consists of
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 minority of male and female workers, representing 15% and 8% respectively.
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 B,
on the other hand
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, depicts the highest level of female staff in servicing, which shows almost
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 of the total share, and 65% of the other sex. A third of ladies work in a manufacturing field and above a tenth of men. The rural areas are the spot for the minority of labourers in the zone.

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