Write a letter to a hotel manager about booking a private room for family party. Explaining What kind of party is it? What do you need in the room? And ask for food and prices?

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am a
ragular
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regular
visitor of your hotel and I often organise a
party
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in
this
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now I want to hire a separate room for my
daughter
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daughter's
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birthday
party
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and
invited
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invite
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my whole family members.
Actually
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Actually,
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I
organise
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organised
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a get-together for my
daughter
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daughter's
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birthday particularly she
like
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likes
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the Alsa
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Alsa
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Alsa's
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theme
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, therefore,
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therefore
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all Devore based on
this
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,gifts bags for kids
also
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beautiful balloons because she likes the most and
also
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arrange
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arranged
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a magician who
entertain
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all of us.
Hence
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,I want really satal decorum.
On the other hand
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,I want some comfortable chairs where all
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the guest
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guest
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guests
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sit
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sits
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comfortably and
also
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I thought
a
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of a
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game with chairs,a musical chair game,
moreover
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,I need a
boofer
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booster
roofer
booger
for music please all the necessary things available there.
Furthermore
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,I want some delicious
cuisines
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cuisine
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with
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at
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affordable prices
in
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for
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the
party
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if you can arrange a buffet system
then
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it would be so outstanding and one more thing that I want Chinese and all dishes
according to
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the Chinese.I hope
your
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you
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would
be arrange
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be arranging
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a better
party
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for us. Thank you for your cooperation and
conside
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consideration
. Yours faithfully, Rabia.

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coherence and cohesion
Make sure to use clear paragraphs to separate different ideas, as it helps the reader follow your thoughts more easily.
task achievement
Try to use more formal language to suit the context of the letter, especially when addressing the hotel manager.
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Clarify the specific requirements for food and pricing more explicitly to ensure the manager understands your needs.
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You've provided a clear purpose for the letter and described the party theme well.
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The inclusion of specific details such as the need for decorations and food preferences adds depth to your request.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • milestone birthday
  • celebration
  • seating arrangements
  • audio-visual equipment
  • customizable food and beverage packages
  • dietary restrictions
  • price list
  • budgeting
  • decorations
  • guests
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