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The line graph below shows average carbon dioxide (co²) emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007.

The line graph below shows average carbon dioxide (co²) emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007.
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The line graph illustrates the average amount of carbon dioxide emitted per person in 4 different countries (the United
Kingdom
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,
Sweden
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, Italy, and Portugal) from 1967 to 2007.
Overall
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 the emission rate of carbon dioxide in Italy and Portugal increased dramatically across the given period
while
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 those in the United
Kingdom
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 slightly dropped.
Sweden
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,
in contrast
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, experienced a growth in
number
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 in the first ten years before seeing a significant decline in the remaining years, making Italy and Portugal surpass eventually. The
number
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 of carbon dioxide emitted in Italy,
initially
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, stood at just over 4
tonnes
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 per person,
then
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 significantly rose to approximately 8
tonnes
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. Those in Portugal were observed
similarly
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 as the
number
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 started at lower than 2
tonnes
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 and skyrocketed to reach its peak at almost 6
tonnes
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 in the final period.
On the other hand
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, the average emission rate in the United
Kingdom
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 was the highest
number
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 at over 10
tonnes
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 in 1967. It,
then
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, gradually went down to under 10
tonnes
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;
however
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, the United
Kingdom
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 had remained the biggest
number
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 of emissions among all countries over the given period.
Although
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Sweden
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, which had the second-highest average emissions at more than 8
tonnes
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, experienced a noticeable growth, reaching its peak at over 10
tonnes
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 in 1977, a remarkable drop was observed, making
Sweden
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 the lowest
number
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 of emissions in 2007.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 73%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words kingdom, sweden, number, tonnes with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • average
  • carbon dioxide (CO2) emissions
  • per person
  • line graph
  • trend
  • decreased
  • increased
  • highest
  • lowest
  • peak
  • decline
  • stable period
  • external factors
  • environmental policies
  • industrial activity
  • comparison
  • data set
  • period covered
  • analyze
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