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The bar chart gives data about the percentage of individuals who ate specific potrion of herbals on a single day in the UK between 2001 and 2008.

The bar chart gives data about the percentage of individuals who ate specific potrion of herbals on a single day in the UK between 2001 and 2008.
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The bar chart illustrates the number of individuals who added
specific
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a specific
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 proportion of herbals to their diet on a single day in the UK for 7
years
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 starting from 2001. All figures are represented as
percentage
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percentages
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.
Overall
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, women
are
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were
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 the most interested party who included herbals for their
cusines
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cuisine
,
whereas
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, children
was
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were
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 the category who had the least interest
on
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in
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 adding nutrition rich
ingreedians
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ingredients
ingredient
for
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to
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 their diet.
It is clear that
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,
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apply
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 the ratio of the consumption of
hearbs
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herbs
hearts
 had gradually increased over time in
women
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the women
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 group and the figures
surpass
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surpassed
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 the 35% margin by peaking in 2006, before experiencing a slight decline to 30% in 2008, where to a
level
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 which it was at 4
years
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 ago.
Similarly
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,
men’s
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the men’s
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 category demonstrated a
leveling
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levelling
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 up on
it
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its
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 trend before, it followed a significant increase to a
level
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at
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of
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 25%.
Thereafter
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, it maintained at that
level
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 for consecutive 3
years
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 until 2008.
On the other hand
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, it is noticeable that, in the
childrend’s
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children’s
calssification
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classification
, it displayed a dramatic rise where it peaked at 25% in 2007, after being
in
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at
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 the same
level
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 for adjacent 3
years
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.
Then
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 it
revesed
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reversed
revised
 the trend in the following year, reaching to
approximatly
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approximately
 to 22%.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words years, level with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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