The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.

The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.
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The bar chart illustrates the top ten countries which produced and consumed electricity most in 2014.
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, China and the United
State
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States
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had the highest
number
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of electrical
production
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and
consumption
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which was around 8 to 12 times of other regions.
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the
number
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of
production
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was slightly higher than those
in
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consumption
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in almost all countries, Germany showed the opposite observation with a larger
number
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of
consumption
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. In 2014, China consumed and produced electricity more than 5,000
billion
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kWh
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, making it the top consumer and producer among given countries, followed by the United
State
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States
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having approximately 4,000
billion
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kWh
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in both
consumption
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and
production
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. Their numbers were much higher than others which consumed and produced no more than 1,100
billion
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kWh
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. Russia took the third place with just over 1,000
billion
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kWh
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;
however
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, there
was
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no big differences among the remaining nations. The
number
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of electrical
production
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and
consumption
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in Japan, India, Canada, France, Brazil, Germany, and Korea Rep. stood between 400 to 1,000
billion
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kWh
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and their
production
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level was higher than the
consumption
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level,
excepted
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only Germany.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Vocabulary: Replace the words number, production, consumption, billion, kwh with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • megawatt-hours (MWh)
  • electricity grid
  • renewable energy sources
  • fossil fuels
  • energy efficiency
  • consumption patterns
  • power generation
  • industrial demand
  • residential use
  • transmission losses
  • energy imports
  • sustainability
  • carbon footprint
  • energy policy
  • capacity
  • infrastructure
  • demand and supply
  • electrification
  • energy security
  • grid reliability
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