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The two pie charts below show the online shopping sales for retail sectors in Canada in 2005 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. (20 mins.)

The two pie charts below show the online shopping sales for retail sectors in Canada in 2005 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. (20 mins.)
The pie charts illustrate the proportion of retail online shopping
sales
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 in Canada between 2005 and 2010. The retail shopping
sales
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 include four sectors which are
electronics
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 &
appliances
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,
food
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 &
beverage
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,
home
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furnishings
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, and
video
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games
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.
Overall
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, in 2010, the percentage of
sales
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 in two sectors,
food
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 &
beverage
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 and
video
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games
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 increased from 2005, but
electronics
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 &
appliances
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 and
home
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furnishings
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sales
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 dropped in the same year.
However
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,
electronics
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 &
appliances
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 were sold the most in both years,
while
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home
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furnishings
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 and
food
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 &
beverage
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 experienced the most significant change rate of all sectors.
Electronics
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 &
appliances
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 accounted for the highest proportion of
sales
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 for both years with 35% in 2005 and 30% in 2010. The second highest sector that was sold online in 2005 was
home
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furnishings
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 at 25%
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 but
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 dropped dramatically to the
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 place with 15% of
sales
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 in 2010.
In contrast
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, the online
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 of
food
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 &
beverage
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 and
video
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games
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 rose 10% and 5%, respectively from 2005 which made
food
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 &
beverage
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, the third highest
sales
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 sector in 2005 at 22%, rose to second place in 2010 at 32%.
This
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 change
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 brought
video
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games
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 from 18% of
sales
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, the least popular sector, to third place at 23% of online
sales
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 in 2010.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 78%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words sales, electronics, appliances, food, beverage, home, furnishings, video, games with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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