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In many countries nowadays, consumers can go to a supermarket and buy food produced all over the world. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

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We are in the
modernization
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 century where you can access everything in a fast and easy way. Recently in Many countries all over the
world
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world,
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 it has been not uncommon to find
food
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 produced globally in the supermarket nearby you.
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 is
though
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thought
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 to be an
advantange
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advantage
, but others argue about the negative impact it could bring.
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 essay will thoroughly analyze and discuss
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 topic before drawing my opinion in conclusion.
In
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 the
on
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one
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 hand,
availability
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the availability
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 of global products and
ability
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the ability
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 to access them is
favored
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 by
human
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a human
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being
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.
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, if someone is living outside his country it could be very beneficial to obtain
food
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 or ingredients that he is familiar to.
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addition
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 it may add to the cultural diversity between countries as when people find things brought from other places to where they live, is interesting to try.
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, it adds Variety to the local
cusine
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cuisine
 and gives a positive impact.
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, others think
transfering
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transferring
food
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 and its distribution toward far sites could yield negative results.
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,
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the Products
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Products
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Product
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storing
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 process can be done in
wrong
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the wrong
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 way, so that It could harm people
cosuming
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consuming
 them.
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, transporting
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this goods
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 will affect the environment because of
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apply
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carbon
emission
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emissions
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 and fuel consumption.
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,
over reliance
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 on global products will lead to
decrease
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a decrease
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 in agricultural practices in the country. In conclusion, development is happening no way,
food
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 and all type of product can be found worldwide distributed in
avariety
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a variety
 of places. In my view, I see that the key to ensuring
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 development is positive lies in finding a balance. It is recommended to mitigate the negative effects of
food
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 distribution and
storing
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, to
setup
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 strict rules by the organizing governmental authorities.

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task achievement
Try to refine your introduction for clarity. Instead of 'it has been not uncommon', consider simplifying it to 'it is common'.
coherence and cohesion
Enhance the logical flow by using more varied linking phrases and ensuring each paragraph clearly addresses one main idea.
coherence and cohesion
Make sure to proofread for spelling and grammatical errors, such as 'advantange', 'though', and 'transfering'.
task achievement
Your essay presents a balanced view, discussing both positive and negative aspects, which is commendable.
task achievement
The points made about cultural diversity and the environmental impact are relevant and important to the topic.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • nutrition
  • cultural exposure
  • competitive markets
  • economic boost
  • employment opportunities
  • carbon footprint
  • environmental impact
  • local produce
  • food security
  • global supply chain
  • sustainable practices
  • consumer choice
  • market dynamics
  • price competition
  • agricultural sector
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