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Band 5

You recently booked a part-time course at a college. You now need to cancel your booking. Write a letter to the college administrator. In your letter: •Which part-time course you booked, •Explain why you need to cancel your booking, •Ask about booking a different course. You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear Sir or Madam, You get 20 minutes to complete this task.

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing
you
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to you

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 to cancel one of the courses which I booked recently.
Last
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 week when my schedule was quite clear I checked your website and registered
in
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for

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 your Data Analysis course which is held on
Wednesdays
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Wednesday

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 evening. Please consider that
although
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 I am eager to attend the mentioned course, regrettably, I will not be able to attend it anymore. The reason is supposed to be a business mission which I was assigned yesterday and is considered to be around three months.
Nevertheless
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, my desire
in
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for

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 data analysis subjects still is keen and it would be appreciated if you
can
Wrong verb form
could

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 merely inform me regarding your upcoming plans with
same
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the same

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 subjects but different
timetales
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timetables
timescales

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starting almost within
next
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the next

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 six months.
This
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 will help me to choose the right time quite fit to my updated plan. I
appologize
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apologise

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once again for
this
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 inconvenience and look forward to your prompt reply soon. Yours sincerely Abraham Streeter

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coherence and cohesion
Make sure to clearly separate your ideas into distinct paragraphs to improve clarity. Each paragraph should focus on a single idea.
task response
Consider rephrasing sentences for better clarity and flow. For instance, 'I am writing you to cancel' could be 'I am writing to cancel...'.
task response
Correct the misspelling of 'apologize' for a more polished appearance.
suitable writing tone
The letter maintains a polite and respectful tone throughout, which is appropriate for a formal correspondence.
complete response
You clearly state your intention to cancel the course and provide a legitimate reason, which is good for task achievement.
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