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Chinese scholars writes on how benefitial its for other country to cooperate with China, what do you think is problematic about it?

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Chinese
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 scholars
Xu
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 and
Wang
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 have contributed to the analysis of the challenges and opportunities in the Sino-Kazakh partnership in the
energy
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 sector, particularly
China
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’s role in
Kazakhstan’s
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 renewable
energy
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development
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. In their joint research,
Xu
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 and
Wang
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 examine
Kazakhstan’s
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 current
development
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 situation of RE’s
development
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.
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, they are pointing at the impact of
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 investments and technology transfers with a focus on wind and solar
energy
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 projects (
Xu
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 and
Wang
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 2019). They highlight key geopolitical risks, including
Kazakhstan’s
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 balancing act between major powers, public
skepticism
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 toward
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 investments, and Russia’s strategic influence in the region, all of which shape the trajectory of
energy
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cooperation
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. Chen (2022) analyzes the competitive advantages of
Chinese
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 renewable
energy
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 technology and its alignment with
Kazakhstan’s
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energy
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 transition goals, emphasizing the role of policy incentives and economic
cooperation
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 in shaping bilateral investment flows.
Wang
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 Jing (2024) expands on these findings by examining the economic, political, and technological dimensions of
China
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-Kazakhstan renewable
energy
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 collaboration, particularly
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 private enterprises.
Wang
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 notes a significant shift in the role of
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 enterprises in renewable
energy
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 projects, transitioning from traditional equipment exports to a design-procurement-construction general contracting and financing model (EPC + F) (\cite{wang2024}:39-41,49).
Wang
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also
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 underscores regulatory uncertainties, including inconsistent policies, high risks for investment related to the fixed contract. The analysts from
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Energy
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 Interconnection
Development
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 and
Cooperation
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 Organization (GEIDC) and scholar Guo Liqun analysed the policies of Eurasian countries on renewable
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in
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perspective
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the perspective
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 of opportunities and challenges for
China
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.
China
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 has geopolitical advantages and technological competitiveness to export
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renewable
energy
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 equipment to Eurasia, including Kazakhstan (Shi et al. 2021). Scholars in
China
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, particularly in the social sciences, often serve as advisors to policymakers. In
this
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 case,
Xu
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 and
Wang
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 argue that industrial barriers—
such
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 as outdated
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 infrastructure, regulatory barriers, limited local industrial capacity, and knowledge gaps in renewable
energy
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 technology—must be addressed to ensure effective and sustainable
cooperation
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. Both
Xu
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 and
Wang
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 focus on relatively successful examples of
energy
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 and renewable
energy
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cooperation
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 between
China
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 and Kazakhstan
while
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 acknowledging certain risks and challenges from the
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 perspective.
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, their analysis tends to either overlook or underestimate the concerns raised by Kazakh and foreign scholars, particularly regarding the potential negative impacts of
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 investments. These include fears of economic dependency, environmental degradation caused by
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carbohydrate extraction, and public opposition to large-scale
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 projects. By emphasizing the strengths of Sino-Kazakh collaboration, their research presents a predominantly
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 viewpoint, with limited engagement with critical perspectives from Kazakhstan or the broader international academic discourse.

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