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The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Number of shop closures and openings 2011-2018 Closures - Openings 2011 2012 2013 2014 2015 2016 2017 2018

The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Number of shop closures and openings 2011-2018 Closures - Openings 2011 2012 2013 2014 2015 2016 2017 2018
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The line graph compares the sum total of closed
shops
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 and the ones that opened recently in a particular country from 2011 to 2018.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 the
number
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 of
shops
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 that had closed went down during the period, with the most significant decline seen in 2015,
while
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 the figures for the newly opened
shops
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 fluctuated throughout, even though they decreased altogether.
To begin
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, looking at the data for the new stores opened in
this
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 country, in 2011, it was well - above 8,000.
This
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number
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 dropped considerably to 4,000 in 2012 but climbed steadily to around 6,000 over two years. In 2018, a significant decline of 3,000 was seen, which is quite low compared to the first year.
However
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, considering the closed
shops
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, the
number
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 recorded at the start of the period was approximately 6,000.
This
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 figure had seen an increased fluctuation to nearly 7,000 in 2014.
Although
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 it saw an unparalleled decrease to just below 1,000 in 2015, it climbed back to a
number
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 almost 1,000 lower than the initial sum before it dropped.
This
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number
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 remained relatively constant until 2018.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words shops, number with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "compares" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "climbed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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