You are supposed to move into a new apartment but you can not do that so because of some problems. Write a letter to your landlord. Explain your situation Describe your problems Tell him when you can move in

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Dear Mr. Patric, I would like to inform you that I
supposed
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to
move
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in
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into
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apartment 11,
devonshire
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Devonshire
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avenue
from
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next
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Sunday
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, but because of my extension in my work
schedule
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I will not
able
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be able
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to
move
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on that day.
Currently
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I am working for one of the
company
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in Toronto, I need to complete my all pending tasks before
i
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will
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apply
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plan to
move
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there and join my new company.
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I am
leaving
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in Toronto and
i
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have some pending work to do in my current working place so its
importanat
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important
for me to stay more and finish everything,
otherwise
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i will not
able
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to get my transfer
in
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to
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new
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the new
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company with
higher
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amount of wage. So it will take some more time that
i
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can
move
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into your apartment. I would like to tell you that probably it will take 3 weeks more for me to
move
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there.
i
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hope you will understand my situation and give me some more time to rent your apartment. Your Faithfully, Disha

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task achievement
Consider revising the opening to clearly state your intention. Instead of 'I would like to inform you that I supposed to move in...' you could say, 'I am writing to inform you that I was supposed to move into apartment 11...'. This clarifies your message from the beginning.
coherence and cohesion
Try to structure your letter more clearly by separating your points into well-defined paragraphs. For instance, have one paragraph explaining your current situation and another one describing the problems. This will improve the overall flow.
coherence and cohesion
Make sure to proofread for small grammatical errors (e.g., 'I will not able to move' should be 'I will not be able to move'). This will enhance the professionalism of your letter.
task achievement
You effectively explained your situation and provided a timeframe for when you expect to move in. This shows good communication.
task achievement
Your tone is polite and respectful, which is important in a letter to a landlord. Keep it up!

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