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The line graph shows the percentage of New Zealand population from 1950 to 2050. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph shows the percentage of New Zealand population from 1950 to 2050. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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"The line graph illustrates the percentage of New Zealand's residents across four
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 groups (0-14, 25-37, 38-45, and over 65) from 1950 to 2050.
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, the percentage of people aged over 65 shows a rise throughout the period, becoming the largest
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 by 2050.
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, the percentage of individuals aged 0-14 and 25-37 declines sharply,
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 the 38-45
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 experiences minor fluctuations before stabilizing. In 1950, the 0-14
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 accounted for 30% of the population.
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,
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 figure is projected to reach approximately 10% by 2050.
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, the 25-37
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 showed a decrease, starting at 20% in 1950 and falling to 5% by the end of the period.
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, the over-65
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 showed a significant increase, rising from 5% in 1950 to a peak of around 20% in 1990.
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 trend
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 off in the following decades, it is projected to reach around 30% by 2050. Meanwhile, the 38-45
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 category fluctuated, rising from 10% in 1950 to a peak of around 15% in 1990, before stabilizing at approximately 10% in 2050."

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words age, group with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fluctuations" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • line graph
  • percentage
  • population
  • steady increase
  • fluctuations
  • notable rise
  • projection
  • stabilization
  • plateauing
  • growth rate
  • population growth
  • timeline
  • trend
  • segment
  • economic conditions
  • migration policies
  • birth rates
  • data series
  • historical
  • forecast
  • intervals
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