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Band 2.5

Well, I would like to start with a general description. This photo shows that 4 people are driving bikes. It’s the height of summer, that is why people are wearing light clothes.

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Well, I would like to start with a general description.
This
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 photo shows that 4 people are driving bikes. It’s the height of summer,
that is
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 why people are wearing light clothes. There are a lot of plants,
such
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 as trees and grass. As for the sky, it has no clouds so it has
the
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a
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 light blue color. Turning to
people
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the people
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 in
this
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 picture, I can guess that they are family. They may be enjoying
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apply
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nature,
singing
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or singing
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,
in other words
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, they are having fun. Another kind of attraction is situated in bikes. Each of them
having
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has
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different
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a different
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bikes
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bike
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, but only one, which is being ridden by the little boy,
destined
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is destined
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 for children. In the background, I can make out that they riding in the botanical garden, which is full of greenery. As for me, I would enjoy having
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 leisure time with my family, if I had an opportunity.
This
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 atmosphere makes me feel optimistic.

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task achievement
Try to provide more supporting details for your main points. For instance, elaborating on how the people might be having fun or what specific activities they could be doing would enrich your essay.
coherence and cohesion
Improve the logical flow between sentences. For instance, when transitioning from describing the group of people to discussing their bikes, using linking words or phrases will enhance the connection between your ideas.
coherence and cohesion
Ensure each paragraph has a clear main idea. You might want to separate descriptions of the environment and the people into distinct paragraphs to improve clarity.
content
You effectively set the scene by describing the environment and the people in the picture, creating a clear image for the reader.
language
Your use of sensory details, such as 'light clothes' and 'light blue color' for the sky, adds vividness to your description.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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