The diagram shows the process by which milk and related products are produced. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features.

The diagram shows the process by which milk and related products are produced. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The diagram shows the process by which milk and related products are produced. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features.
The given diagram demonstrates the course of
milk
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,which
occurrs
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occurs
in stages.
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,cows first
gives
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give
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milk
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then
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it is
milk
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take turns turning into
milk
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for sale and used to make dairy
products
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. In the
first
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first,
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the cows are grazing .
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Secondly
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Secondly,
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the cows
milked
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are milked
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using machines twice a day .After that, the
milk
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is stored in a refrigeration storage ,where it is cooled .And fresh ,natural
milk
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is delivered to the factory. Once at the factory,producers make various dairy
products
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from the
milk
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.
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as cheese ,cream and
better
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butter
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and many other
products
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.
Milk
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is used to create a wide range of useful
products
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.
After
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this
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,the
milk
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is pasteurized and packaged.At the close, the foodstuffs are sent to other supermarkets and shops.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words milk, products with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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