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Band 2.5

Your English-speaking friend who lives in your town has asked for your advice about learning a new sport. Write an emall to your friend.In your email • recommend a new sport that would be suitable for your friend to learn • explain how your friend could learn this sport • suggest that you both learn this sport together.

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Dear Martha, Hello, how are you, I hope everything is
doing
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going
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 well. I am writing to you because you asked me
advice
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for advice
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 about learning a new sport. I
am highly recommend
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highly recommend
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in
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apply
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playing
tennis
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. I thought
this
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is
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was
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 suitable for you, because of your body shape. You have really strong arms and hands
therefore
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 you would
playing
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play
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tennis
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 very well.
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, you are really
genius
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a genius
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 you will learn it easily. In my neighbourhood, there is a quite big
tennis
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courte
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court
also
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 it is free. If you have a limited budget, you would
have
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 use it whenever you want.
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, you need a coach because you are
beginner
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a beginner
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. You could not learn it by yourself. Fortunately, I have a friend who
have
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has
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 been working as a
tennis
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 teacher for 7 years. He can teach you. Surprisingly, I was looking for a new hobby too. If you need a friend, I would suggest me. We can handle it together, and I know it would be enjoyable. I hope you will say yes. I am looking forward to receiving
answer
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an answer
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my
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to my
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 letter. I miss you
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too
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to
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so
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 much Love, Kate

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coherence and cohesion
Ensure that the email starts with a more formal greeting and follows with a clear structure to improve coherence.
task achievement
Make sure to support your recommendations with more detailed explanations and examples of why tennis would be a good match for your friend.
coherence and cohesion
Try to improve grammatical accuracy, for example, use 'I highly recommend' instead of 'I am highly recommend' and 'tennis courts' instead of 'tennis courte'.
task achievement
You identified a suitable sport considering your friend's body shape and ability, which shows good understanding of the task.
task achievement
You expressed eagerness to find a hobby together, which adds a personal touch to your recommendation.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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