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The diagram illustrates the process that is used to manufacture bricks for the building industry. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. The Brick Manufacturing Process

The diagram illustrates the process that is used to manufacture bricks for the building industry. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. The Brick Manufacturing Process
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The process diagram depicts the
the
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apply
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process of
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bricks
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brick
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 manufacturing in the building industry.
Overall
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, brick
prodcution
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production
 is a
liner
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linear
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 process consisting of seven
kay
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key
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 stages. It begins with digging the
clay
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 and it ends with delivering the processed brick to the customers.
First,
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clay
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 is
digged
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dug
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 by using an excavator, after
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clay
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the clay
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 has
sent
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been sent
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 to a conveyor roller which contains a metal grid. After being added the sand and water to the
resisual
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residual
clay
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 particles, the mixture
is send
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 to either
wire
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a wire
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 cutting or moulding cavity.
As a result
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,
block
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a block
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 of
bricks
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 can be obtained. In the subsequent stage, a stack of
bricks
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are
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is
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 kept inside an oven. After keeping the stack in the oven for 24 to 48 hours,
while
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 dying
is
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moister
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moisture
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 contamination is taken out from the product,
it
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and it
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 is sent to a klin where
futher
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further
 heating is done. Inside the klin moderate drying
is taken
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takes
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placed
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place
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while
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,
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 it is heated
upto
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up to
 200 to 980 degrees
of
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apply
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celciues
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celsius
. Before, the end product
being
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is
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 sent
in to
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into
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 a cooling chamber, it is
futher
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further
 heated to
higher
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a higher
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 temperature
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of upto
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upto
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up to
 870 to 1300
celcius
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Celcius
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. After keeping the stack of
bricks
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 for 2 to 3 days, it is packaged. Once the packaging has
completed
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been completed
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, as the final step, the end product is delivered to the end customers.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words bricks, clay with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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