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It is neither possible nor useful to provide university places for a high proportion of young people. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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These days, the government can't provide
university
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 places for a high
precentage
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percentage
 of young people. I
a gree
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agree
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of
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with
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this
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 point, so in
this
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 essay, I am going to discuss
this
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veiw
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view
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In
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 the one hand, that will
effect
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affect
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 of
economic
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, each country has a plan to improve all services that young people need,
such
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 as
education
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 in college and at school.
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,
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apply
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 it is
a
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hard to provide
site
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a site
the site
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 for them at
university
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, they should
study
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 well at school, and they must
to
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apply
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get a high score,
that
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which
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support
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supports
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 them to go to high
education
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,
as
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such as
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 college and
university
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.
Also
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,
the
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apply
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most country
need
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needs
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private
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the private
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 market to enter
in
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apply
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university
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universities
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,
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 in Oman , if students need to go to Suhar
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university
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University
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, they should get a high
precentage
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percentage
as
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of
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 98%.
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, nowadays, students
study
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 hard, because they want to
study
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in high
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higher
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education
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, and the government support them by giving them money
,
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apply
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 and
provide
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providing
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 some services
for
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to
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 them.
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,
hostel
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a hostel
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, and bus.
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, it is very difficult
that
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for
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 the
govrnment
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government
provide
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to provide
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for
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apply
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them place in
the
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apply
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college or
university
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,
due to
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 teachers and students
need
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needing
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 more services ,
as well as
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they want
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wanting
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 salaries and
a
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apply
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high
conidition
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conditions
. In
addtion
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addition
, the
economic
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economy
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 will decline, if they provide
free
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a free
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 place for them, they will suffer in the future ,
they
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and they
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can't
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won't
 get on job. In conclusion, I believe that if anyone
need
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needs
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 to
study
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in
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apply
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a
high
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higher
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education
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, they must
study
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 well and they will get care and support from the government.
Thus
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, they will
achive
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achieve
 their goal without
feel
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feeling
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 uncomfortable.

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coherence and cohesion
Try to use a clearer structure by separating your introduction, body paragraphs, and conclusion. Use distinct paragraphs for each main point.
language
Be cautious with grammar and spelling, as errors can make your writing harder to understand. For example, correct 'precentage' to 'percentage' and 'gove' to 'government'.
task achievement
Ensure that your arguments are well-supported. Provide clearer examples and explanations to strengthen your main points.
task achievement
Your essay reflects a genuine understanding of the topic and presents multiple viewpoints.
task achievement
You have attempted to provide examples, which is a good strategy to support your points.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • limited resources
  • quality of education
  • strained resources
  • job market
  • underemployment
  • competition for skilled jobs
  • vocational training
  • apprenticeships
  • economic constraints
  • public budgets
  • inefficiencies
  • devalue
  • significance
  • perceived quality
  • universal access
  • diversity in skills
  • balanced society
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