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The charts give information about employment in the UK in 1998 and 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts give information about employment in the UK in 1998 and 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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This
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 pie chart illustrates the percentage of United Kingdom
employment
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 rate among
men
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 and women in 1998 and 2012.
Overall
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, the proportions of workers remained about the same over the time period, with
men
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 constantly dominating the workforce.
Firstly
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,
men
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 sum up the majority of
employment
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 rate across both charts,
although
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 with a slight decrease of 6% between 1998 and 2012, with 53% of
men
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 in 1998, and 47% working full-time in the United Kingdom. In regard to part-time
employment
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, only 6% and 7% of
men
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 work in 1998 and 2012 respectively.
However
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,
while
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 the number of full-time
employment
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 among
men
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 decreased,
this
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 figure rose among women, which stood at 19% in 1998 to 26% in the year 2012.
Nevertheless
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, female workers on a part-time basis decreased by nearly 2
percent
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per cent
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 in the 14-year period. Looking at the charts,
it is clear that
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 the majority of
men
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 prefer to work full-time compared to women in both years.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words employment, men with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • employment rate
  • economic landscape
  • information technology
  • service industry
  • manufacturing
  • agriculture
  • sector shift
  • healthcare sector
  • public administration
  • education sector
  • advancements in technology
  • traditional industries
  • modern sectors
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