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Some people believe that unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of high school programs (for example working on charity, teaching sport to younger people) To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Introduction
Today humans consider that volunteer
necessary
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 in high school.I
concider
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consider
 it is
wonderful
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 idea.Because
this
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 gives you
mind
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 and it teaches some
people
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 should have
a
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gratitude and help others.And to develop soft
skills
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Body paragraph 1
It will give you
experience
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 for
life
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 and community
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In order not to make
mistakes
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,we need to have
experience
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 and if a person has
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experience
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experienced
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 her or his
expendiry
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expenditure
expanding
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mind
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 and change thinking
Body paragraph 3
People
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 should not
do
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make
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mistakes
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 and develop soft
skills
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Body paragraph 4
It helps
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Yourlife
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Your life
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skills
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 Today humans consider
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volunteer
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 necessary in high school.I
concider
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consider
 it is
wonderful
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 idea.Because
this
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 gives you
mind
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 and it teaches some
people
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 should have
a
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apply
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gratitude and help others.And to develop soft
skills
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Body paragraph 5
It will give you
experience
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 for
life
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 and community
Body paragraph 6
In order not to make
mistakes
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,we need to have
experience
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 and if a person has
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experience
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experienced
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 her or his
expendiry
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expenditure
expanding
expensive
mind
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 and change thinking
Body paragraph 7
People
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 should not
do
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make
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mistakes
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 and develop soft
skills
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Conclusion
It helps for your
life
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Your life
Yourlife
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Life
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skillsConclusion
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skills conclusion
:if you have good
skills
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 you will
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 good work and you can
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 with
people
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 because you have soft
skills
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task achievement
Your essay has some good ideas, but they are not clearly developed. Try to explain your points in more detail and use specific examples to support your arguments.
coherence and cohesion
Make sure to have distinct paragraphs for each part of your argument. This will help improve the logical flow of your essay.
coherence and cohesion
Pay attention to grammar and spelling. Small mistakes can distract from your message. Writing practice will help with this.
task achievement
You express a clear belief in the value of community service, which is a great starting point for your argument.
Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • unpaid community service
  • compulsory
  • high school programs
  • charity work
  • social responsibility
  • empathy
  • teamwork
  • leadership skills
  • personal development
  • civic participation
  • engagement
  • motivation
  • academic performance
  • life skills
  • burden
  • enforcement
  • privilege
  • citizenship
  • volunteer work
  • community needs
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