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You have decided to leave your current job due to some reason. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter, tell him about the decision and mention the reason for it describe what you have learnt in the job request for a recommendation letter and experience letter

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Mr. Susthira,
i'm
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 submitting
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letter
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 as my resignation
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. I've been working in
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 office for almost seven years now,
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starting as an
Adminstration Staff
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administration staff
, and
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 got promoted to Credit Analyst until
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 reached Senior Credit Analyst
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last
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 year. Under your leadership,
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 have learnt so many things about banking administration, loan approval and risk mitigation for every business around Jakarta. Not only that
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I
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 learned how to read the room and understood people's risk appetite before creating credit
reccomendation
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recommendations
. My work of line
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 my knowledge
around
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 Business Law and enriched my experience in Legal matters. Which is one of the
reason
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 why
i'm
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 enrolling for
Master's
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a Master's
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 Degree
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 year. I hope you're willing to write a
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recommendation
letter
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 and experience
letter
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 for me as I'm going to start my Law Master's Degree
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University
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 of Melbourne
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 July 1st 2025.

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coherence cohesion
Consider structuring the letter into clear paragraphs for better readability. Ensure each paragraph focuses on one main idea, which will improve logical flow.
task achievement
Make sure to use formal language consistently throughout the letter, especially in the closing statements and requests.
task achievement
You demonstrated a good grasp of your experiences and learnings from the job, which adds a personal touch to the letter.
coherence cohesion
Your request for recommendation letters is clear and appropriately placed towards the end of the letter.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • resignation
  • appreciation
  • professional growth
  • recommendation
  • experience letter
  • skills development
  • team collaboration
  • career transition
  • opportunity
  • support
  • guidance
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