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yo have worked for c company for a short time during your college course. Write a letter to the head of the department expressing your gratitude . in your letter , your should: thank the head of the department expalin how this has helped you say what your future palns are

Hello Sir, I am writing
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 letter to express my gratitude for the guidance which was
bestowned
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bestowed
 by you to me during the short period of time. I
have
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 not enough words to express my happiness as
,
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i
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am
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abled
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 to learn many things during the internship in your enterprise. I am
proudly
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say
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due to
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 that internship
i
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m
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was
abled
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 to learn how to manage
the
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conflicts in
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 easy way.
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,
the
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 communication
skill
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has
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 improved and now
i
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 can easily talk with various people without any
hesitate
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.
Futhermore
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Furthermore
,
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 not only learnt how to work with
team
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the team
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 but
also
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 you taught me how
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 can solve
the
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customer queries.
Eventhough
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Even though
, it was a short time,
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 really garnered valuable experience. In the
future
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i
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 would like to apply
in
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to
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a prestigous
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prestigous
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prestigious
 multinational company as
,
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i
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 have learnt many skills which are very useful for any employee. My aim is to
do
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work in
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a softwear
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softwear
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software
 company in the future,which
i
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 will definitely attain . Once again
i
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 would like to say thanks for your
assist
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. yours faithfully, jatinder kaur.

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Grammar
Make sure to check for typographical errors, such as 'bestowned' which should be 'bestowed'.
Coherence
Try to use more varied sentence structures to enhance your writing.
Cohesion
Break the text into clear paragraphs, each addressing a specific point.
Task Achievement
You expressed your gratitude well, which is essential for this letter.
Task Achievement
Your intention for future plans is clearly stated, showing direction and purpose.
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