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The chart below shows the number of men and women in further education ir Britain In three periods and whether they were studying full-time or part-time summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons whore relevant.

The chart below shows the number of men and women in further education ir Britain In three periods and whether they were studying full-time or part-time summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons whore relevant.
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The chart shows the number of men and women in
further
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education
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 in Britain in three different years: 1970, 1981 and 1990-1991. It compares full-time and part-time study as well.
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, we can see that part-time
education
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 was more popular for both genders in all three periods.
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, women's participation increases faster compared to men's. In 1971, around 1 million males studied part-time, but that number dropped slightly to about 850,000 in 1980. By 1990, it grew a bit again to nearly 900,000. The number of men in full-time
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 was much lower, starting at around 100,000 in 1970 and rising to over 200,000 by 1990. For females, part-time
education
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 increased from nearly 700,000 in 1971 to over 1 million in 1991. Full-time study for women
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 grew from under 100,000 to about 200,000 in the same period. It shows that female students become more active in their future
education
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 over time.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words education with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "compares" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increases" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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