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The following two pie charts show the results of a survey into the popularity of various leisure activities among European adults in 1985 and 1995. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The following two pie charts show the results of a survey into the popularity of various leisure activities among European adults in 1985 and 1995. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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These two pie charts illustrate a survey about
activities
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 that European adults did for leisure in 1985 and the next 10 years.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 each study resulted in different
activities
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 they dominated. In 1985, the data was categorised into five items. People preferred to watch TV, with exactly 32 per
cent
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 of them
did
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doing
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 it.
Then
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 it was followed by eating out, with more than 23 per
cent
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went
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going
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 out
for eating
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to eat
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. Around 20 per
cent
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 were likely to have talking
session
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sessions
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 with friends,
while
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 only below 20 per
cent
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 of people took their time for families. Other
activities
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 took 6 per
cent
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 of the sample. In the next 10 years, a new category was added, which is playing computer games. More than 25 per
cent
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 spent their time on games. There was a slight drop in TV
activities
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, from 32 to exactly 30 per
cent
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. A significant increase happened in conversation with friends to 26 per
cent
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. The others had below 10 per
cent
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 for each category.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words activities, cent with synonyms.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • pie chart
  • survey results
  • percentage
  • popularity
  • increase/decrease in popularity
  • constant
  • trend
  • individual activities
  • group activities
  • physical activities
  • non-physical activities
  • emerged/disappeared
  • decade
  • socio-economic shifts
  • cultural changes
  • influenced
  • leisure activity trends
  • proportion of time
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