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2) Studying with a group of students in a classroom is more beneficial than learning online at home. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Studying from home can be beneficial, especially for those
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 organized and have a great time management skill.
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 there are many
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 aspects of learning online, there are
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 drawbacks that may negatively impact students,
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 of interaction with learners and teachers and a decrease in focus on school-related activities. Online learning has grown significantly over the past ten years, which is a positive development. Pupils now have more access to
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 and learning tools,
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 YouTube, Google, and ChatGPT.
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, it greatly benefits
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those who do not have the time to commute to another location or do not have enough income to invest in education.
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, there are tools available to students that do not require any capital, which is a considerable advantage.
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 I agree with some elements of online learning as outlined above, I believe that there are more downsides than upsides. The
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 elements included diminished focus
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 of concentration and the possibility of multitasking
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 studying.
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 can be explained by the fact that concentration may be easily interrupted, as access to other tools is simpler, sometimes effortless, and almost instantaneous compared to a group studying in a classroom. It is worth noting that
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 can improve communication, the ability to think and respond quickly, attention to
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, and problem-solving skills.
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, home learners are deprived of stronger interaction and the capacity to connect
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 with people. I concur with the viewpoint that lacking these abilities can cause more
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 impacts than
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 ones, as they are crucial to human development.

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Clarify your thesis statement in the introduction. Clearly state whether you agree or disagree with the statement for a stronger response.
coherence and cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph has a clear main idea and follows a logical structure to enhance coherence.
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Provide more specific examples or personal experiences to strengthen your argument and enhance task achievement.
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Consider summarizing your main points in the conclusion to reinforce your argument and provide closure.
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Your essay presents a balanced view by discussing both the advantages and disadvantages of online learning.
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You have included relevant points about the importance of interaction and focus when learning, which enhances your argument.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Collaborative learning
  • Debate
  • Discipline
  • Engagement
  • Feedback loop
  • Peer support
  • Educational resources
  • Adaptive learning
  • Self-motivation
  • Independent study
  • Digital literacy
  • Virtual classroom
  • Accessibility
  • E-learning
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