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The line graph shows the percentages of Australian exports with four countries. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

The line graph shows the percentages of Australian exports with four countries. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant
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The graph describes the rates of Australian exports
with
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 four countries .
According to
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 the
graph
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 there were compared between percentages of exports of Australian and four other countries in different years . The percentages of India and China in begin
is
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 the same 3% , But in China
start
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 to up slowly in 1995 and 2000 to reach the peak
28
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of 28
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% in 2012 ,
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hand
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 India there
is
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down
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a down
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 in rates
unitl
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until
 2000 and
start
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started
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 to up from 2000 to 2010 after that it
return
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returns
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 to down in 2012 . In
US
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the US
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start
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started
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 at 10.5% in 1990 and
decrese
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decrease
decreased
 in 1995 and
countious
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continuous
in
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to
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 decrease and increase in the rates until
reach
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reached
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 in 2012 is 7% , But the peak
of
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 the US in 2000
that
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reach
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reached
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 12% .
Finally
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 ,
in
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apply
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Japan
starts
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started
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in
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at
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 25.5% and
and
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done
in
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at
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 16.5% in 2012 . There was just
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a decearse
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decearse
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decrease
 in
percentage
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 of of Japan .

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • line graph
  • percentages
  • exports
  • trend
  • upward trend
  • downward trend
  • fluctuations
  • stable
  • economic ties
  • demand
  • decline
  • recovery
  • policy changes
  • trade relationship
  • fluctuation
  • peak
  • temporary surge
  • specific events
  • incentives
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