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The bar chart illustrates the proportion of individuals aged 16 and over in the Great Britain who used the internet for various activities during the last three months of 2009 and 2019.

The bar chart illustrates the proportion of individuals aged 16 and over in the Great Britain who used the internet for various activities during the last three months of 2009 and 2019.
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The bar chart illustrates the proportion of individuals aged 16 and over in
the
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Great Britain who used the
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internet
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Internet
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 for various activities during the
last
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 three months of 2009 and 2019. The number of adults using the
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internet
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 rose significantly from 2009 to 2019. Using the
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internet
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Internet
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 for sending or receiving emails was the highest proportion among the others with 80% in 2019 and
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65%
2009
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in 2009
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.
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, the use of
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internet
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 for making video or voice calls was significantly lower, with only 45% in 2019 and 15%
2009
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. As for
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internet
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Internet
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 banking, the percentage
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 dramatically from about 18% in 2009 to around 50% in 2019

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words internet with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "illustrates" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "proportion" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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