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The bar chart below describes some changes about the percentage of people were born in Australia and who were born outside Australia living in urban, rural and town between 1995 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below describes some changes about the percentage of people were born in Australia and who were born outside Australia living in urban, rural and town between 1995 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given chart illustrates the proportion of
people
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 who were born in
Australia
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 and outside
Australia
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 living in urban, rural, and
towns
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 from 1995 to 2010. Units are measured in percentage.
Overall
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, it clearly can be seen that the majority of
people
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 born inside and outside
Australia
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 lived in the cities. In terms of the
people
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 who were born in
Australia
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 and lived in the cities in 1995, it started at around 50, which experienced a relative increase to around 65 in the final year.
However
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,
people
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 who lived in
towns
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 and rural areas in 1995 started at 20 and 30 respectively. In the following fifteen years,
people
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 who lived in
towns
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 and rural areas decreased at a similar point, with approximately 18 Regarding the
people
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 who were born outside
Australia
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, who lived in cities at the beginning year, started at exactly 60 and in 2010 increased by 20. Meanwhile,
people
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 living in the
towns
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 in 1995 stood at 15 and remained steady until the final year.
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,
people
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 who lived in rural started at 40, it
then
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 drastically declined to around 5 in the final years.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 68%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, australia, towns with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Percentage
  • Demographic
  • Trends
  • Urban areas
  • Rural areas
  • Town
  • Native-born
  • Foreign-born
  • Migration patterns
  • Economic factors
  • Government policies
  • Increase
  • Decrease
  • Steady
  • Peak
  • Trough
  • Time frame
  • Significant changes
  • Distribution
  • Notable
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