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the diagram below shows the process by which bricks are manifactured for the building industry

the diagram below shows the process by which bricks are manifactured for the building industry
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The stage
diagramm
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diagram
 provides information about
steps
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the steps
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 of brock production to supply for construction.
Overall
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, it is obvious that there are seven processes in brick manufacturing starting from digging clay from the kand and delivering them to industry.
To begin
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 with,
excavator
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the excavator
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 digs the clay from the land in order to
grid
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grind
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 the clay in
roller
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a roller
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 machine meanwhile
seperaters
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separating
 the sand and water.
I
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In
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the next stage,
ready
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the ready
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 mixture is given to moulds or wire cutters
then
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 raw
brick
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bricks
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 are sent to dry in the oven
during
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for
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the
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apply
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24-48 hours.
Subsequently
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, bricks are baked moderately
in
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at
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 200°C-980°C following the high temperature
with
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of
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 870°C-300°C in the kiln.
This
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 step
ending
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ends
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 with
colden
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a colden
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 chamber in the period of 48-72 hours. After packaging the ready production
are
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is
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 delivered to the constructing plays.

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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • diagram
  • manufacture
  • bricks
  • building industry
  • process
  • dig
  • prepare
  • clay
  • mold
  • shape
  • dry
  • fire
  • kiln
  • cool
  • package
  • fired
  • overview
  • importance
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