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Writing Samples
Band 5.5

You are going on a month training programme to the UK and know that the head of the course would like one of the participants to be the social events' organiser. Write a letter to the Training Organiser. In your letter • expressing your interest in the role • requesting more information about it • explaining what experience you have Begin your letter as follows: Dear ...,

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Dear Sir/Madam I am writing to inform you about my big interest in taking a role to be the social
events'
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 organiser. I have been always interested in these kinds of
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positions
 that require
certan
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certain
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 as
leading
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 and planning skills since a young age in the school. I believe
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 have the potential and the experience for that role.
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, I think that I still lack a lot of information about it. Kindly I am going to need you to provide me some details about the exact tasks, the structure, and my potential team members. With regard to my experience,
last
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 year of November, I was the social
events'
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events
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 organiser of a local program in the UK called SDD.
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 program had
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significant success and went viral all over
the
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social media and I was
honored
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 by the manager for my great results. I'm looking forward
hearing
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to hearing
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 from you soon Best Regards, Saad Hdb

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Consider providing a more detailed introduction in the first paragraph to clearly state your enthusiasm for the position.
coherence and cohesion
Work on structuring your paragraphs better. Each one should ideally focus on a single idea to improve clarity.
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Ensure to check for spelling and grammatical errors, such as 'possions' (positions) and 'certan' (certain), which can affect the overall impression.
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Your enthusiasm for the role is clearly expressed, which is important for the task.
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You provided relevant experience that showcases your capability for the role.
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