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You have just arrived in an English-speaking country to study or course. Before you meet your English teacher, I advised you to: —Thank him for dinner —Tell him about your hobbies —Say how my advice helped you.

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Dear Mr. Thomas, I hope
this
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 Journey. First of all, I just want to thank you for
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 countless efforts that you made to make
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 able to study at my dream location.
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, I
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 myself
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lucky that I got an opportunity to
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dinner with you. I am wordless to demonstrate my happiness for that most unforgettable memory. It was a
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 moment for me. I loved the taste of all the delicious dishes still in my mouth.
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, My classes have been started just two days ago. I feel quite confident
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 my studies. My course is named
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Computer System Technician, seems very compelling. All my teachers
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 a lot to understand
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every aspect of
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. Importantly, you are not only my teacher but
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 a god for me. I always got
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 from you to achieve my goal. Your advice
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 confident and
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independent helps incredibly  to make my parents proud
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myself
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. I will definitely follow
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 rule in
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 future to make it more bright and resilient. Thank you for your unlimited support and guidance. Yours faithfully, Navjot Kaur

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Coherence and Cohesion
Your letter starts well, but consider simplifying some of your phrases for clarity. For instance, instead of 'I am wordless to demonstrate my happiness for that most unforgettable memory,' you could say, 'Words cannot express how happy I was to have that unforgettable memory.'
Grammar
Make sure to consistently use appropriate articles and plurals in your sentences. For example, instead of 'I considered myself a lucky that I got an opportunity to had a dinner with you,' you could say, 'I consider myself lucky to have had the opportunity to have dinner with you.'
Task Achievement
Ensure your main points are well-supported with specific examples. For example, when discussing your course, you might mention a particular project or topic that excites you.
Positive Aspect
Your letter has a warm and appreciative tone, which is fantastic for expressing gratitude.
Positive Aspect
You mentioned specific details about your course, which adds depth to your writing.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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