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Some think newspapers are the best method for reading the news while others think other media is better. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.

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In
this
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 contemporary era, it is very important to keep
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 up to date
of
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 what's going on around the world, some argue that
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newspaper
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the newspaper
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 is the best way to know current affairs, others
beleive
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believe
 that there are other modes are
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.
This
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 essay will elucidate both viewpoints in
subsequient
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subsequent
 paragraphs and my opinion in
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. To commence with,the popularity of
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newspaper
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newspapers
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is
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has
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 significantly decreased
becuase
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because
 of the boom of
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internet
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the internet
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 and
usage
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the usage
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 of social media after 2010. These days
people
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 prefer
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the internet
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internet
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 as it is more easily accessible, we can read the news around the world in different languages
just
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with just
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 by few single clicks on
internet
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.
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, these days
people
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subsitutes newpaper
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substitute newspapers
 with
E-paper
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e-papers
 which are basically electronic
form
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forms
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 of
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newspaper
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newspapers
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 available on your gadget through
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internet
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the internet
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, these are more handy as
compare
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compared
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 to traditional
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newspaper
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newspapers
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.
Thus
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 the
afore mentioned
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aforementioned
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 reason explains that other
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sources
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 of media are more in trend.
On the contrary
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,
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newspaper
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newspapers
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has
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have
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 been the source of truth
since
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for
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 decades,
it
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and it
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 is still widely used in rural areas, even in cities mostly by elder
people
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. In remote areas where there is no proper
internet
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,
people
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 still rely on
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newspaper
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newspapers
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 and read
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them
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 as a hobby in their leisure time or when they are travelling.
According to
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 the survey by
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wellfare
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welfare
society
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,
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newspaper
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newspapers
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 are still
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the
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first choice for
indiviuals
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individuals
 who cannot afford expensive electronic gadgets like mobile phones, tablets and laptops.
Hence
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, the above example vividly illustrates that some
people
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 still opt for newspapers when it comes to
aquire
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acquiring
 the news.
To conclude
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, there are many ways from
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which
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 we can obtain the news, some
people
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 evolve and use
latest
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the latest
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 technology to stay updated,
whereas
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 there are still many
which
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who
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 like the
old school
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old-school
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 way. In my opinion, newspapers are not widely available everywhere as not everyone
use
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uses
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it
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them
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 these days as they used to
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apply
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in early 2000. Not only that
newspaper
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 are portable but not the best option when you are travelling
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especially
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 in monsoon season, which makes other media
source
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sources
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 much preferable to
the
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apply
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modern age readers.

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language
Ensure that punctuation and spacing between words are correct (e.g., "ourself" should be "ourselves", "subsequient" should be "subsequent").
organization
Improve the logical flow and clarity by ensuring that each paragraph begins with a clear topic sentence.
content
Make an effort to provide more specific examples that directly support your arguments related to each viewpoint.
content
The essay presents both sides of the argument clearly, which is crucial for task achievement.
organization
You have a good structure in terms of paragraphs that address different aspects of the topic.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Credibility
  • Editorial oversight
  • Investigative journalism
  • Digital divide
  • News cycle
  • Sensationalism
  • Media literacy
  • Filter bubble
  • Echo chamber
  • Citizen journalism
  • Paywall
  • Fake news
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