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University students often focus on one subject. However, some people think that universities should encourage students to learn a range of other subjects. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays, university admissions are more likely to focus on a particular
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. But, from others, opinion universities must encourage students to grab knowledge of various subjects
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 particular
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. I have a balanced view of
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 statement. My viewpoint is justified in the ensuing paragraphs. On
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 side, concentrating on a single
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 can be beneficial as that will give a deeper understanding of that
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 and can be helpful for a career perspective in that field of
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, In England, the research mentioned that 70% of students doing a major in an individual
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 are likely to get more success than students doing
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 studies of all subjects comparatively. On the flip side,
admission
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 pursuing studies in more than one
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 are rounded.
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, they are considered more helpful and advantageous to the economy. To explain, as they have
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 knowledge of
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,they can use their skills in their job and will be considered as assets to the company or the business. To provide an example, a pupil working in a medical store is required to do some accounting
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 the absence of an accounting clerk not being able to come to work because of an emergency. In that situation,the medical person can figure out the calculation for that time.
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, the company doesn't really need someone to cover for the accounting clerk.
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, it has its own pros and cons whether recruitment are focusing on one dependent or more than one prone.
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, it all depends on the
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 need of the government demanding for the type of generation.

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task achievement
Ensure to clearly define your position on the topic in the introduction. Your viewpoint should be articulated more strongly.
coherence and cohesion
Improve the clarity of your arguments by using clearer linking words and phrases. This will help the reader follow your ideas more easily.
task achievement
Provide more specific examples to support your arguments, which can make your points stronger and more persuasive.
content
You have made an effort to present both sides of the argument, which shows a balanced perspective.
formatting
Your essay is structured with clear paragraphs, which is a good practice for academic writing.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • specialized knowledge
  • technologically advanced
  • innovation
  • expertise
  • well-rounded education
  • critical thinking
  • creativity
  • adaptability
  • competitive edge
  • dynamic job market
  • singular focus
  • mental health
  • personal development
  • diverse curriculum
  • self-awareness
  • elective courses
  • primary subject
  • blending
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