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Some people feel that manufacturers and supermarkets have the responsibility to reduce the amount of packaging of goods. Others argue that customers should avoid buying goods with a lot of packaging. Discuss both views and give your opinion

a number of
people
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 think that the factory and modern market have the obligation to push down the total
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packaging of things.
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 others argue that customers ought to avoid purchasing goods that contain a large number of packaging.
This
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 opinion. On the one hand, some
people
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 believe that producers and distributors were obligated to minimize the number of wrapping
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products
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.
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,
this
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 phenomenon happens as both of those actors are not only producing
products
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 but
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 producing waste simultaneously.
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,
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 actions pose several threats to the environment.
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, plastic bottled
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 are extremely difficult to decompose
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 the soil.
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, both the producers and distributors should limit the waste that they make.
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, some
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 of the community agree that customers should wisely choose the wrapping of
products
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 that they want to buy.
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, some businesses are producing eco-friendly packaging nowadays.
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 several decades. It is
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 noteworthy that some distributors are not accepting non-reusable
products
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,
people
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 are offered some
products
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 that can be
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 and
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recycled
 which
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 in some specific stores.
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, an alternative option is available in order to alter the conventional product. In conclusion, both
factories
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 and
supermarkets
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initiative
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 are crucial in order to reduce the amount of packaging of things as they introduce the
products
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society.
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people
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 feel that
customers'
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 role is
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vital as they can pick an alternative for their needs.

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task achievement
Make sure to clearly state your opinion in the introduction and conclusion to enhance clarity.
coherence and cohesion
Ensure each paragraph starts with a clear topic sentence that connects to your main argument.
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Provide more specific examples to support your points, which will strengthen your arguments.
structure
You have presented both sides of the argument, which is essential for a balanced discussion.
structure
Your essay has a clear introduction and conclusion that frame the discussion.
Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Sustainability
  • Eco-friendly
  • Carbon footprint
  • Excessive packaging
  • Biodegradable materials
  • Corporate social responsibility
  • Consumer advocacy
  • Environmental stewardship
  • Waste reduction
  • Recycling initiatives
  • Green practices
  • Minimalist lifestyle
  • Resource conservation
  • Sustainable consumption
  • Packaging alternatives
  • Regulatory measures
  • Ethical choices
  • Environmental impact assessment
  • Renewable resources
  • Compostable packaging
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