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The graph below shows the average number of UK commuters travelling each day by car, bus or train between 1970 and 2030.

The graph below shows the average number of UK commuters travelling each day by car, bus or train between 1970 and 2030.
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The aim of
this
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 report is to analyse the statistics of travelling in
UK
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.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 most citizens prefer to travel by car and
this
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 tendency continues to increase. On the opposite side of the graph lay train and
bus
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 travellers with different outcomes. During the ten-year period from 1970, the usage of all three transportation methods was steady and only in 1980
more
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did more
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noticable
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noticeable
 changes
started
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 to occur. Since
then
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 commuters operating automobiles and public trains were more common.
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,
bus
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 services started to slowly lose their clients. Somewhere around 2015 train users surpassed
bus
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 users and sored up even more sharply.
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the data about citizens using cars. In
final
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the final
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 result mostly used vehicles are cars with double
number
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the number
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 of train users and three times more than
bus
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 travellers. In brief, people have
most
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the most
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 interest in travelling by
cars
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car
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 and that has a positive likelihood.
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, people prefer the public transport less.

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