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The graph below shows the average number of UK commuters travelling each day by car, bus or train between 1970 and 2030.

The graph below shows the average number of UK commuters travelling each day by car, bus or train between 1970 and 2030.
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The aim of
this
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 there are three lines each corresponding to a different form of transportation: car, bus,
train
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or train
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. The lowest used from 1970 to around 2015 are trains starting at about 2
million
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 commuters and ending up at 3.5
million
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where
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it
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apply
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overcomes buses, keeps rising
up
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and is expected to climb up to 5
million
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 in the future. Moving on, there are buses starting at 4
million
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 in 1970 and slowly rolling down to 3.5
at
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 2015 where it dips below trains, keeps going down and is expected to decrease to 3
million
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. At the top half of the graph are cars starting at 5
million
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 in 1970 and almost constantly climbing to 8
million
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 in 2024, it is expected to keep increasing up to 9
million
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. In
conclusion
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 cars are dominating in terms of the average UK commuters, buses and trains are roughly the same, only changing in popularity in 2015.

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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 90%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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