Some people think that the increase in the number of obese people should be the responsibility of governments, while others think it should be the responsibility of individuals. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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essay will discuss whose

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is the growth of obese

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. There are two mainstream ideas that will be discussed. Some might say it is the

responsibility

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of the

government

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while

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others believe the

responsibility

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should fall on an individual. In the following

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I will discuss arguments, present examples and

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give my opinion.

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opinion is that

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governments should take accountability for the increase in obese

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.

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idea stems from the fact that the

obesity

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crisis is caused by

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habits of a community as a whole and can be controlled by taking systematic action. It is the

government

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's

responsibility

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because obese

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have higher risks

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heart and other medical conditions, which over time will cost the

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more than

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the precautionary measures now.

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, the

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could regulate school policies, provide active spaces and healthcare specialists for the obese and promote healthy lifestyles in order to decrease

obesity

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. Others believe that it is up to the individual to control the

obesity

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rise.

Obesity

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is an individual problem as it is each person that has to change their habits and lifestyle. Eating healthy and being more active is an individual choice that a person has to make in order to lose

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. It all comes down to

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and internal motivation.

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, scientific studies suggest that the

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that was lost by the motivation of an individual resulted in more sustainable results, compared to

people

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who lost their

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by outside pressure as they were more likely to regain their

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after some time. In conclusion, there are two ideas of who should take accountability for the rise in

obesity

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, one side believes it is the

government

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who should take the

responsibility

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and the other states that it is an individual decision. The

people

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who believe that the

government

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is responsible support their idea by stating that it is a systematic problem and providing resources will save money for the

government

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in the long run, and the supporters of individualism state that only the choice of

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can result in a healthy and sustainable result. In my

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the

government

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should take

actions

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to

insure

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ensure

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that

obesity

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is

in

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control, as individuals can change it is not possible to control the

obesity

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crisis on an individual level.