You have bought some clothing online and are not satisfied with your purchase. Write a letter to the company that you bought the clothing from. In your email •give details of the purchase •describe the problem •explain why you need a replacement urgently
Dear Sir or Madam
I am writing to express myself about my dissatisfaction purchase which is bought a dress your online store on 21st January.
This
code is CX:3574. It was a red, satin and mini dress. I was very excited Linking Words
while
waiting for Linking Words
this
costume. Because I bought it for my birthday party.
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However
, I was unsatisfied with Linking Words
this
result. When my package arrived, I realized it was not what I had ordered . I saw a yellow jacket. Linking Words
Moreover
, that size was not fit for me, I wanted medium , Linking Words
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however
, that was small. I felt so sad.
I need a replacement urgently because my birthday party Correct word choice
but
on
24th January. Add a missing verb
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Also
, I can not change my costume because the party has a dress code. It is a really important issue for me. Especially, I prefer your company because of your high-quality fabric. Linking Words
That is
why I paid a lot of money.
I am looking forward to receiving your answer, I want to exchange my purchase urgently.
Yours Sincerely,
Kate DawsonLinking Words
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coherence and cohesion
Make sure to clearly state the details in a more organized way. For example, structure your introduction and details about the purchase and issue more clearly.
task achievement
Try to use more varied vocabulary and sentence structures to convey your message more effectively. This enhances clarity and keeps the reader engaged.
task achievement
You have done well in expressing your dissatisfaction and urgency regarding the situation, which is important in a letter of this kind.
coherence and cohesion
Your closing statement shows a polite request for resolution, which is appropriate for this type of letter.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite