Some people say history is one of the most important school subjects. Other people think in today’s world, subjects like science and technology are important than history. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion, give reasons for your answers and include any relevant examples from your own experience or knowledge.

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us and give us more
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before to improve and learn from them
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my own opinion
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subject is as important as
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and
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we need
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us to prevent we make
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same horrible
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as covid-19. When that
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the world and
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are in absalutely danger, but because the
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we learned better hygiene
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to keep us self and prevent the same
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that happened
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europe
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we can use the
history
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of
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and
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to create the vaccine and
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to keep people safe.
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to cause it. Because
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that can instantly improve and
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as you travel around the world and learn the local
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they invented or
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because of the geography and what kind of
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, all of them
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important
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us. without one of
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beautiful world and people.

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task achievement
Make sure your introduction clearly states both views before presenting your opinion. Consider rephrasing for clarity.
coherence and cohesion
Ensure proper grammar and spelling throughout your essay to enhance its readability.
coherence and cohesion
Each paragraph should clearly address one main idea or argument. Consider separating the impacts of history more distinctly.
task achievement
Conclude your essay by summarizing the main points clearly, reinforcing your opinion and why both subjects are important.
task achievement
You make a clear argument on the importance of history and provide relevant examples to support your points.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay engages with both sides of the argument, which is important for a discussion type essay.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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