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The graph below shows the regional household recycling rates in the UK, France and Germany from the years 2005-2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, making comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the regional household recycling rates in the UK, France and Germany from the years 2005-2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, making comparisons where relevant.
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The line chart gives information about the regional household
for
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apply
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reusing
percentage
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 in the three countries between 2005 years to 2015.
Overall
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, In the
beginning
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beginning,
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 France had the highest level and in the
end
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end,
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 it was
significant
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a significant
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 decline.
while
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 UK and Germany it was at
the
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a
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 moderate
rate
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furthermore
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 , in the
last
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 years it has a fast rise and almost the same
rate
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 . In France, it was the reusing amount 40 per cent in 2005 and in 2013 was in the
last
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 three years
trough
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through
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30
rate
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 and in the end increased slightly to 40
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percentage
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per cent
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.
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 , In the UK started in 2005 it was approximately 35
rate
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 and it
has
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apply
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fluctuated compared with Germany and in 2015 it was at the highest level of 60
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percentage
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per cent
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.
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Although recycling
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Recycling
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 in Germany started at 20
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percentage
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per cent
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 and
continues
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continued
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 to increase to around 55 rates in the
last
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 year.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, rate with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • regional household recycling rates
  • overall trend
  • significant increase
  • steady rise
  • fluctuations
  • marginal decline
  • notable drop
  • peak
  • trough
  • comparative analysis
  • year-on-year growth
  • data patterns
  • rate of change
  • noteworthy milestones
  • disparities
  • environmental policies
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