International tourism has become a huge industry in the world. It has brought enormous benefits to many places. At the same time, there is concern about its impact on local inhabitants and the environment. Do the problems of international tourism outweigh its advantages? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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It is undeniable that
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tourism
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is providing different opportunities and advantages to tremendous
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countries
around the world.
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, the concern related to
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and local wildlife
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the
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conquests
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is becoming
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topic to debate. To commence with, there are a number of reasons for believing that
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have
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detrimental impacts on local
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wildlife
,people and
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the environement
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environement
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environment
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of exploration nowadays, local animals and birds are often forced to habitat in
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or under the influence of authorities.
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,
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occupants
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not enjoy their surroundings
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cages and limited access just to attract
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.
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, residents have to deal with
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variety of people from different cultures,
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and even though the languages which eventually
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issues
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as conquering language barriers and
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increment
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around them and
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, tourists usually attain tremendous resources from
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environement
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environment
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visiting a place for exploring and
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harm the economy relentlessly.
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, activities
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as air travel,vehicle use, noise pollution, outdoor activities,
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and littering
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often have negative impacts on
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the environement
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environement
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environment
as well. To combatt
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issue, informed decisions from
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goverment
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government
should be regulated
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as strict rules
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recycling, dumping and not affecting surroundings at any
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which will
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society with a sustainable and eco-friendly
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environement
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environment
.
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,
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tourism
should be limited to a certain limit and proper guidelines and principles should be set up for every place
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travelling or
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visiting
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local residents.
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,
although
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tourism
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plays a significant role in rendering funds and profit for economic growth,
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it is crystal clear from
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the above
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testimonials that the negative impacts of it on local people and wildlife initiating disruption of living ways of life for them can oversee its benefits.

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Grammar
Improve grammatical accuracy, especially in subject-verb agreement and word forms (e.g., 'tourism has' instead of 'tourism have', 'consequences' instead of 'conquences').
Content
Add specific examples to support your points about the impact of tourism on local wildlife and environments.
Cohesion
Enhance the logical flow of your arguments. Ensure that each paragraph has a clear main idea, and make transitions between ideas more explicit.
Task Response
Your essay addresses the question and discusses both sides of tourism's impact, which is important for task achievement.
Coherence
You have structured your essay with a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion, which helps with coherence.

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