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Some people think it's better to choose friends who always have the same opinions as them. Other people believe it's good to have friends who sometimes disagree with them. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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It is a very crucial decision in your when you choose
a
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friends
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friends
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. Many people think it's good to have
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apply
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friends
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 who have
same
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the same
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 thought process as they carry. Some people prefer to have
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friendship
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friendships
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 with
those person
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that person
those people
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 who have a different point of
views
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view
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 on
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a
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 similar situation. Having
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the
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 same opinion is great
to make
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for making
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 a decision faster
although
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 both understand each
others
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other's
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 choice without saying anything. When two individuals have a similar opinion at a particular time
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it is
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 a good thing but
sometime
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sometimes
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 it
also
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came
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comes
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 up as a problem for them.
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- someone driving a car very fast on the road, both
the
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friends
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are thinking
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think
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 that it is wrong to drive so fast
at
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in
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 a public place but none of them
consider
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considers
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 the level the emergency of that person. When your companion
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a different suggestions
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a different suggestion
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then
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 it possible that you can see
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both
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sides of a situation
positive
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positively
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as well as
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negative
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negatively
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, but
sometime
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sometimes
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 it
also
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come
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 to an end of the friendship.
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- me and my friend always go to
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the
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 same
coffee
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 shop and take our favourite
coffee
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.Once I told my friend to try
the
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another
coffee
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 because I was bored with the same one,
initially
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 she rejected my opinion because she was not ready to try something else;
when
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 she agreed, we try the 2-
3
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different flavours and we found another
coffee
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 which
taste
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tastes
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 better than our regular
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. In conclusion, having a good friend is a miracle in your life.
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Whether
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 your thoughts match with each other or not
but
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your friendship should
the
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be the
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 best
in
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apply
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a
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way to help and support the other one. With time
friends
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 accept the pros and cons of another individual.

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task achievement
Your introduction could be clearer. It’s important to present the topic and your opinion more distinctly.
coherence cohesion
Try to connect your points more logically. Adding linking words can help improve the flow of your ideas.
coherence cohesion
Make sure to proofread your writing to fix small grammatical errors and improve clarity.
task achievement
You provided personal examples that support your points, which is a strength in your essay.
coherence cohesion
Your conclusion summarizes your thoughts well, reflecting a personal belief about friendship.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • bond
  • support
  • unconditional love
  • shared values
  • mutual understanding
  • trust
  • emotional well-being
  • interdependence
  • societal norms
  • companionship
  • loyalty
  • advice
  • experiences
  • mentorship
  • trustworthy
  • reliable
  • reliable
  • cherish
  • strengthen
  • deepen
  • attach importance to
  • prioritize
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