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The table below shows the sales made by a coffee shop in an office building on a typical weekday. ielts-academic-coffee-shop-sales Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The table below shows the sales made by a coffee shop in an office building on a typical weekday. ielts-academic-coffee-shop-sales Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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The table provides data on the
sales
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 of
coffee
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,
tea
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,
pastries
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, and
sandwiches
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 at a
coffee
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 shop in an office building during different time intervals on a typical weekday.
Overall
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,
coffee
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 is the most popular
item
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 throughout the day,
while
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sales
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 of
sandwiches
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 and
pastries
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 fluctuate depending on the time of day. In the morning (7:30 - 10:30 AM),
coffee
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 has the highest
sales
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, with 265
units
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 sold, followed by
pastries
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 at 275
units
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.
Tea
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 is less popular, with 110
units
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,
while
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sandwiches
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 have the lowest
sales
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 at just 50
units
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. By midday (10:30 AM - 2:30 PM), the demand for
sandwiches
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 increases significantly, reaching 200
units
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, making it the second most purchased
item
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 after
coffee
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 (185
units
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). Pastry
sales
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 decline to 95
units
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, and
tea
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sales
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 drop slightly to 50
units
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. In the afternoon (2:30 - 5:30 PM),
pastries
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 regain popularity, selling 150
units
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,
while
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coffee
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 remains steady at 145
units
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.
Tea
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sales
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 slightly rise to 35
units
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, but sandwich
sales
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 drop to 40
units
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, making them the least purchased
item
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 during
this
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 period. In the evening (5:30 - 8:30 PM),
coffee
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 continues to be the top-selling
item
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 at 200
units
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, and sandwich
sales
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 increase again to 110
units
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.
Pastries
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 and
tea
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 see the lowest
sales
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 of the day at 80 and 75
units
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, respectively.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 73%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words sales, coffee, tea, pastries, sandwiches, item, units with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "drop" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increases" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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