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The chart below shows the total number of minutes (in billions)of telephone calls in the uk, divided into three categories, from 1995-2002 . Summarise the information

The chart below shows the total number of minutes (in billions)of telephone calls in the uk, divided into three categories, from 1995-2002 . Summarise the information
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The bar chart illustrates the total
number
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 of
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mintues
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minutes
 (measured in billions )
that spended
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spent
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in
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 telephone calls in the United Kingdom, by three
category
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categories
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 local, national and international, and mobiles. In eight- year period, between 1995 to 2002.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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local
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the local
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- fixed line was the most popular type of
commnication
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communication
 in the
Uk
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UK
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 throughout the
years
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,
while
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, mobiles were the least used in the same timeframe.
Moreover
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, national and international- fixed line usage
were
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 in the middle
comapred
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compared
 to the
others
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other
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 types. In 1995, the local calls
was
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 at 70
billion
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mintues
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minutes
,
then
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 grew
graudally
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gradually
 and reached its peak
by
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 90
billion
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mintues
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minutes
 in the
years
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 1999.
However
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, the figure started to decline significantly in the
last
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 three
years
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,
with
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reaching above 70
billion
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mintues
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minutes
 by 2002.
In contrast
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, national and
international-ficed
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international-fixed
line
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lines
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 were approximately 35
billion
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mintues
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minutes
,
in
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at
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 the beginning of the period, After which,the figure witnessed a gradual rise throughout the
years
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 and stopped at 60
billion
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mintues
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minutes
. Meanwhile, mobiles started with a humble
number
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 below 10
billion
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mintues
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minutes
; but, faced a
slightly
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 increase in
number
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 in 4
years
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. By 2000, the
number
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 of
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mintues
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minutes
 began to
graw
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grow
 rapidly till the end of the period.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, mintues, years, billion with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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