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Writing Samples
Band 4.5

Your Local council is considering closing a sports and leisure centre that it runs, in order to save money. Write a letter to the local council, In your letter - give details of how you and your friends or family use the centre - explain why the sports and leisure centre is important for the local community - describe the possible side effects on local people if the centre closes

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Dear Sir/Madam, I am writing
this
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 letter in response to the email
i
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I
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 have seen regarding the closure of
Activity
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the Activity
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 and recreational centre in our
town
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. So, First of all, it is the only building in our
town
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 which
have
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has
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 a gym and swimming pool in it. My brother
is accessing
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this
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 gym
from
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for
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past
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the past
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 five years and my niece
also
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acquire
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acquired
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 some swimming lessons in that centre. Meanwhile,
i
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I
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 visit there
along with
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 my family to do some yoga sessions. Accessing all of these facilities under one roof in
such
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 a small
town
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 is quietly impossible for some people and
this
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 is
a
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the
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 main reason
of
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for
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 worrying about
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the uavailability
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uavailability
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availability
unavailability
 of
this
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 centre from next week.
Moreover
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, it is not only important for me but
also
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facilitate
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to facilitate
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 local residents with volleyball and basketball hall where a team of our
town
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 is been
practicing
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practising
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 for their
finalswhich
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finals which
 is in
next
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the next
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 six months. In
future
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the future
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 nobody will be able to take advantage of any of these facilities and have to commute to
another cities
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another city
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 to find an alternative.
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, it will become a
dauting
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daunting
 task for every resident to maintain their physique as most of the
yougsters
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youngsters
 rely on gyms and
equipements
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equipment
.

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coherence and cohesion
Consider using more complex sentence structures and varying your vocabulary to enhance your writing.
task achievement
Try to improve the clarity of your ideas by providing specific examples and clearer transitions between thoughts.
task response
The letter addresses all the key points outlined in the prompt, showing a good understanding of the task.
suitable writing tone
You maintained a friendly tone in the letter, which is appropriate for addressing the local council.

The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

  • Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

  • Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

  • Best regards,
  • Warm wishes,

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