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The graph below shows the average number of UK commuters travelling each day by car, bus or train between 1970 and 2030. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the average number of UK commuters travelling each day by car, bus or train between 1970 and 2030. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The graph illustrates some information about how many
vechiles
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vehicles
 that are
using
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 for travelling by UK commuters each day from 1970 to 2030 .
Overall
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 , it can be seen that using cars and trains
are
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is
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 increasing gradually .
In contrast
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 , the number of
bus
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buses
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is
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has
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falling
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 moderately over a period of 60 years starting from 1970. As can be clearly seen from the graph , the proportion of cars
are
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 growing significantly
over
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 6
million
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 in 2000 . After a stability in 2010 , it
have
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had
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 a
considerate
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 climb
at
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 9
million
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 in 2030 . Another , the
quantity
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 of trains
also
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 going up remarkably from well under 3
million
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 in 1970 to just over 4
million
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 in 2030 .
However
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 , the figures
of
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for
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the bus
a bus
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bus
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buses
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are falling
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fell
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 considerably from 4
million
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 in 1970 to 3
million
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 after 60 years .

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fall" was used 2 times.
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