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The bar chart shows the percentage of the total world population in 4 countries in 1950 and 2002, and projections for 2050. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart shows the percentage of the total world population in 4 countries in 1950 and 2002, and projections for 2050. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar graph
illustates
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illustrates
 the proportion of the total world
population
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 in four countries India,
China
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, the United
State
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States
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 of America, and
Japan
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, in 1995, and 2002, and
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the prediction
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prediction
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predictions
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 for 2050.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 the percentage of
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population
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the population
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 in
China
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,
Japan
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 and the USA
have
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has
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 been increasing gradually
throught
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through
throughout
 the period,
while
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 India's
population
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 is witnessing a decline in rate in the same timeframe. In 1950, nearly 20 % of
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the world
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world
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world's
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 total percentage
were
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was
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 living in India.
However
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, the figure
stared
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started
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 to increase slowly throughout the years, and it
predicte
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predicted
predicts
 that the proportion
will
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would
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 reach 15% by 2050.
On the other hand
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,
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China
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the China
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, the USA, and
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Japan
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Japan's
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population
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's
rate
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rates
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witnesed
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showed
upward
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an upward
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 trend.
China
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 will dominate the chart in the future by approximately 20% in 2050.Meanwhile, both
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Japan
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Japan's
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 and the
USA
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USA's
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rate
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rates
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 are below 10% during the 100-year period.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words population, china, japan with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Bar chart
  • World population
  • Percentage
  • Projection
  • Demographics
  • Trend
  • Significant change
  • Ranking
  • Shifts
  • Decline
  • Growth
  • Comparative
  • Population distribution
  • Notable
  • Increase
  • Decrease
  • Population dynamics
  • Data interpretation
  • Summarize
  • Trends over time
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