IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 5

Your local public library wants to make improvements to their services and facilities. In order to get ideas from the public, they have asked library users to send them suggestions in writing. Write a letter to the librarian in your letter -describe what you like about the library -say what you don’t like -make suggestions for improvements

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Dear Sir or Madam, It comes with great pleasure that our local
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library
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 willing to improve
their
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its
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 services and facilities.I would like to appreciate that the
library
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 has
enormous
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 variety of books ,novels and
also
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 a kid's room .
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,despite these facilities, there is a room which needs development, as we modernize our lives in
this
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 technology-Oriented world.
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, there is no access
for
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 online resources in the
library
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 .
Todays
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Today
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,
young
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the young
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 generation have
keen
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a keen
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 interest in the
internet
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Internet
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 and
therefore
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 our
library
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loses
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 readers.
Secondly
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,no social events are held there . After working butt off the long day , some people
wants
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 to decompress by reading books or
gather
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 with each other .
Due to
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 lack of activities , they
wants
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 to go to the other libraries.
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, hours of operation
is
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are
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 the major obstacle
poses
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 a barrier
for
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 attracting the local community. To rectify these implications, I would suggest that you
can
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apply
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hire one IT expert and
lunch
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launch
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 one website
of
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for
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 our
library
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 . So, it can be easily accessible
for
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 everyone .
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 , I know we have friendly staff . Why
not
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don't
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 we organise some social
compititions
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competitions
competition
 among kids
along with
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 youngsters or
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the elder
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elder
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elderly
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 community .
Further
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 , I know it's hard but the
library
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 should be
operate
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operating
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 until 9 pm
,
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so that later comers from work or
colleges
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college
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 can take benefits . I hope these suggestions will
proved
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prove
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 beneficial for you . I always pray best for our
library
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 . Yours sincerely, Kamal

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coherence and cohesion
Consider breaking down your ideas into clearer paragraphs for better readability. Each paragraph should focus on a single point or suggestion.
task achievement
Include a more formal opening and closing to suit the letter format, for instance, using 'Dear [Librarian's Name]' if known, and a proper closing statement.
coherence and cohesion
Use varied sentence structures and vocabulary to enhance the overall quality of your writing.
task achievement
You provided specific reasons for your suggestions, which demonstrates a clear understanding of the library's shortcomings and needs.
task achievement
Your tone is polite and appreciative, which is commendable, especially in a suggestion letter.

Structure your letter

A letter needs to be written using a proper format, including the following:

  • A greeting (Dear sir/madam, Dear John, Dear Mr. Smith)
  • The main body (consisting of paragraphs for each part of the letter)
  • A closing (Yours sincerely, Yours faithfully, Best wishes, Kind regards, Love)

When writing a letter as part of the IELTS General Training Writing Task 1, it is important to include the bullet points presented to you in the question.

All three bullet points need to be presented. And remember that some bullet points contain more than one element. So, make sure to watch for ‘and’ and plurals.

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