"Many people believe that the government should invest more in public transportation to reduce traffic congestion and air pollution. Others argue that individuals should take more responsibility for their own transportation needs and that the government should not spend more on public transportation. What is your opinion? Discuss both views and give your own perspective." This prompt asks you to explore both sides of the argument and then express your own opinion on the topic.

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Most citizens of one country believe that in order to address the issue of traffic and have
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quality air
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sorrounding
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is should be the focus by
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on the other hand
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, people argue that every citizen should
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responsible
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its
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own
transportation
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.
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essay will cover the discussion on both ideas and provide my own opinion. It is the work of every
government
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to provide
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safe and quickest
transportation
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to its
citizen
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and to bring the
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lifestyle in harmony. In order to achieve
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clean and safe
transportation
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,
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government
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should invest
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railways,trams and bullet trains.In
this
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way
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traffic jams will be avoided especially during rush hour. Trains and
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are the best
option
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to tackle the issue of
conggestion
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congestion
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own path and doesn't need to go with cars.It
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povide
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commuters safe and fast travel
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it can load a large volume of passengers in one go.Aside from fast
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it doesn't affect much on air pollution.It
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makes goods and
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travel to
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distination
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destination
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the
rigth
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right
time which means a boost to the country's economy .
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, some people think that it is the duty of
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to provide
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own
transportation
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and not put the burden
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the
government
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However
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these approach
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will just
makes
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road
conggestion
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consumption
worst
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of cars
grow
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but access to roads
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limited. Aside from that,
emmission
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emission
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from cars will worsen ozone problems.
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having
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car is good because you can control your time and privacy,
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however
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it has a great impact
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the public. In conclusion, to achieve a good flow of traffic and to gain clean
sorrounding
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surroundings
it
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is the duty of both
government
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and its citizens.
Government
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should provide its own citizens
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more
accessable tranportation
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accessible transportation
and wider roads.People should
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balance
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usage
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its
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own car.

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coherence and cohesion
Ensure each paragraph has a clear central idea and develops it thoroughly.
language
Use more varied sentence structures and vocabulary to enhance the overall quality of your writing.
task achievement
Provide specific examples to strengthen your arguments and make them more persuasive.
task achievement
The essay demonstrates awareness of both sides of the argument, which is essential for a balanced discussion.
task achievement
The points raised about the benefits of public transportation were relevant and could be developed further.

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

  • for example
  • for instance
  • to illustrate this
  • to give a clear example
  • such as
  • namely
  • to illustrate
  • take, for example

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Traffic congestion
  • Air pollution
  • Sustainable
  • Infrastructure
  • Carpooling
  • Emission reduction
  • Public transit
  • Economic growth
  • Ride-sharing
  • Efficiency
  • Accessibility
  • Lower-income residents
  • Shift from private vehicles
  • Job creation
  • Technological advancements
  • Incentivize
  • Feasible
  • Reliable
  • Viable
  • Alleviate
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