Computers and modems have made it possible for office workers to do much of their works from home instead of working in offices every day. Working from home should be encouraged as it is good for workers and employees. Do you agree or disagree?

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In modern times, modern computers and modems have enabled office
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to
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online, making some people think it is beneficial for
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. I believe it should be encouraged by employers as long as
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are productive. Online working has brought several benefits to
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and should be supported by employers. First and foremost, it enables office
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to be in a calm atmosphere.
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to say, some
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claim to be irritated by the noisy
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atmosphere
in the office and the need to communicate with other people they do not want to interact with. Working from home allows
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to relish their solitude and
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in silence, which, in the majority of cases, positively affects their concentration and productivity.
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, online
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do not depend on the working conditions in offices,
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as equipment, temperature, and food. They are able to build their own workplaces with a comfortable temperature in the room,
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chairs, and homemade food they can eat whenever they wish. Notwithstanding
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, excessively comfortable working conditions may lead to one notable negative effect.
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, many
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often feel too relaxed, as they struggle to
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with determination and concentration in a homely atmosphere. Family members, pets, and household duties often pose
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to
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, negatively affecting their productivity and aspiration to
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, it impairs the
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communication
between
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. Indeed, many
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believe face-to-face interaction
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effective as they find it is easier to pass documents, information, and ideas when talking to a person in person.I believe that in these particular cases, employers should stop allowing these
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to
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from home, as distracting factors negatively affect their
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performance and
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them to
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in offices. All things considered, encouraging online working often benefits
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, providing them with more personal space and the opportunity to set up their ideal workplaces.
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,
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type of
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can
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lead to adverse consequences,
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as loss of productivity among those who cannot concentrate at
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while
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at home.

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