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A friend of yours has recently written to you asking for advice about a problem at work. You have had a similar problem at your workplace in the past. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter, tell your friend how you feel about the problem explain how you faced a similar situation in the past suggest possible solutions to the problem

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Dear raj, I hope you are doing well,I found your letter and I was sorry
tO
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 hear that you are facing
probelmS
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problems
 at your
work
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.I know it is frustrating as I
have been
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faced
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this
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 exact same
issues
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 two
year
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 ago. In my case, I was dealing with
heavy
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 workload and unrealistic deadlines.It made me feel overwhelmed and
stressedout
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stressed out
stressed-out
.In order to resolve
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 issue, I decided to have an open conversation with my manager and in that
conversation
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 I explained
him
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 the problems that I have been facing.I asked him to give me manageable deadlines or provide me
a
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helping hand.I
also
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 suggested
him
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to
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mark urgent tasks so that I prioritize them ,
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 helped in, managing the
sechdule
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schedule
according to
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work
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. In your situation, I would
recomend
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recommend
to have
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 an honest conversation about your problems with
manager
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the manager
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.
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, you can ask him
either
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 reduce the workload or provide
a
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help in the form of an extra employee.I
also
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 suggest
to
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 you break down your
work
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in
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 smaller parts ,which would result in , decreased overwhelmed
work
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. I hope the suggestions I gave you
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 be helpful. Thank you, Best regard, Amarpreet Singh.

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coherence and cohesion
Make sure to use proper punctuation and spacing after commas and periods. For example, you should add a space after 'well,' and 'thank you,' for clarity.
coherence and cohesion
Consider providing a more structured layout for your suggestions, possibly using bullet points or separating them into distinct parts to improve readability.
task achievement
Proofread your letter for typos, such as 'rehased' instead of 'faced', and be careful with plural forms, e.g., 'problems' instead of 'probemS'.
task achievement
You express empathy towards your friend's situation, which is very important in friendly communication.
task achievement
You shared a personal experience which helps to create a connection and shows valid support for your advice.

The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

  • Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

  • Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

  • Best regards,
  • Warm wishes,

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