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The diagrams below show the site of a school in 2004 and the plan for changes to the school site in 2024. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagrams below show the site of a school in 2004 and the plan for changes to the school site in 2024. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The diagrams illustrate the plan for changes
of
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to
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 the site of a
school
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in
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over
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 a 20
year-period
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year period
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.
Overall
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, the
school
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 site experienced a significant rise
of
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in
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 students; it went up from 600 to 1000 students.
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, there was a noticeable decrease
of
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in
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 field area.
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As well as
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Also
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, almost all the trees remained the same over 20 years, except
north
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the northern
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 and northeastern trees.
Initially
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, let's consider the western side of the second
school
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 building.In 2024, they made the connection between
school
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 buildings, and connection between car
parkings
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parking
, and reduced the length of the path, but the car park, road and main entrance remained the same. Moving to the eastern side of the second
school
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 building. Actually, there are pretty many changes. The most eye-catching alter is the introduction of a third
school
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 building and
reduction
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the reduction
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 of the sports field.
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, the sports field was replaced by a new car park.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 78%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words school with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • diagram
  • layout
  • facility
  • infrastructure
  • main building
  • green area
  • sports hall
  • library
  • expanded
  • recreational activities
  • structural improvements
  • accommodate
  • enrollment
  • renovation
  • development
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